Chocolate Homunculus

[boswell]

Hello Frost*ies.

I have writed a new song hurr durr.

For the time being it's called Chocolate Homunculus, and it's a little bit mad.

http://soundcloud.com/jeff-boswell/chocolate-homunculus


Would love to hear a bit o' the old feedback, especially the constructive type. It's by no means well mixed (or well written) so any tips would be very much appreciated

Thank you all!

[Pedro]

Cool. I'll listen and feedback when the soundcloud site will let me - it seems to be playing up at the moment. :?

[boswell]

Cheers Pedro

I noticed soundcloud was being a bit fussy, here's an alternative link

http://www.perceivedasequals.com/random ... adness.mp3

[Pedro]

Gah! Sorry, the curse of "can't listen at work, forget to listen at home2!

Just listened and really like it. Nips along nicely until it settles into the "dreamy" ending.

If I have to say anything I might suggest trying to "smooth the join" at 2.27 by maybe applying an effect or a longer decay to the "buzzing" solo...it ends a little abruptly.
Also, in the quieter section, the piano to the right is nicely reverbed (which pushes it back and makes it atmospheric) the higher tine-like notes to the left are a little to "present" (if that makes sense) and could be "reverbed" or "delayed" a bit?

Thanks for sharing...like the track name too by the way.

[boswell]

Thanks Pedro, I couldn't have asked for better constructive feedback!

If I have to say anything I might suggest trying to "smooth the join" at 2.27 by maybe applying an effect or a longer decay to the "buzzing" solo...it ends a little abruptly.

the higher tine-like notes to the left are a little to "present"

Believe it or not, those are the two things that were bugging me from the get go.

I actually planned on having the buzzing solo bend downwards at the end, but for whatever reason the take I went with I forgot to do it. After realising the error, I put a really roomy reverb effect which eeks in right at the last note, but it doesn't do much to lengthen the note. I think I need to have a little tweak about with that.

And the twinkly tines (Healing Guitar, Korg Legacy...I usually stay away from presets, but it is a beaut!) - I had toyed with giving them the distant radio treatment too, but in the end decided it would sound nice to have some sort of foreground element, perhaps like a person playing guitar in time with the radio. Of course this doesn't work when it's a synth guitar, with pad strings layered on top

I'll push that back, and maybe bring in some other interesting noises towards the end.

I don't want to do the whole crackling fire and purring cat thing again like I did with Snowman, but I'll work on something


Again, top notch advice Pedders, my hat is tipped to you.

[johninblack]

Very, very nice and other than the comments made previously is pretty bloody good. Have to agree with Pedro totally.
I don't usually take to instrumental tracks unless they have that something "extra" that takes place of the vocal melody making me forget there are no vocals. A+ for Boswell, A* if you fix the gap and ending

[boswell]

Thanks very much

Should have the updated version finished soon. Got sidetracked transcribing RnL songs (bloody insanity!) but I'll have a tweak later tonight.

I actually toyed with making some sections a bit longer and adding vocals to them, but 1.) I can't sing and 2.) Even if I could, I have nothing interesting to sing about :lol:

Thanks again  

[boswell]

Well I changed it as per advice, and I think I've fixed most of the problems....and created some new ones which I didn't notice until after I uploaded it. They're mostly to do with the guitar EQ though, and I don't think I'll fix it now until I get a proper guitar take done, from a proper guitarist.

Anyway here is the final (for now) version

http://soundcloud.com/jeff-boswell/choc ... ulus-final

[Mikey]

Anyway here is the final (for now) version

Not 'arf bad  

[boswell]

Cheers Mikey